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[Coronavirus: A Text Adventure]

It's pretty interesting. Some plotlines and outcomes I expected, some definitely not (like attacking a guard with a sword in hopes of cleansing the humankind with the virus).

I don't think the intro is necessary. There's no denying that it's cool, and judging by my own experience, all those camera angles must have been a pain to animate… but it doesn't affect the story or gameplay in any way.
Of course, unless there's some ultimate ending or secret which takes place in the hospital and happens to *you* after you earn all the endings (e.g. you uncover tidbits of information about your situation and the hospital through the life simulator, and then there's a final cutscene). I only reached a couple of the endings, so I wouldn't know; but it'd be cool.

I also wish you could skip the typewriter animation (e.g. by pressing any key), because you go over the same initial passages over and over again and don't want to wait for them to load. I feel like I'd have to draw a decision tree to earn all endings, but it's probably fine, since things like checkpoints and going back would ruin the concept that you're controlling a new person, a new life after every ending.

So in summary, it's a text adventure in a really nice package, but it's intriguing and there's a lot of variety.

jamesanimations responds:

Thanks so much for the review! You guys have incredible ideas, i'll make sure to implement all of these. A secret ending where something happens in the actual hospital would be sick. Hopefully I can get this done by the end of the day before the game goes public!

[Eggs]

It's quite good. I like the variety with instant death eggs and bonus point eggs.
But the egg spawning needs a little more work because sometimes it's literally impossible to grab all falling eggs (two or three eggs at the same height, eggs at the opposite sides of the screen). When you lose, it's usually not because you messed up, but because you were unlucky with the egg placement.
You could either fix the spawning algorithm (maximal distance between neighbouring eggs), or you could alter the environment (smaller area, looping screen border…) or use mouse for movement (instant bowl placement anywhere on the screen, but it also makes the game a lot easier), or add a way to restore health every once in a while.

Filippo550 responds:

I added mouse control and the option to choose between keyboard and mouse controls. If you want you can check it out

[First Game]

For a first game, it's really good, although there are definitely some ways in which it could be improved. I'll just rattle them off quickly – but it's your game and your decision if the feedback has any merit and can make your game better.

Gameplay:
– It's pretty repetitive. I don't think it's very interesting to have to level up every archer again from scratch and by using a shared experience pool.
Then you're forced to make a decision between many average-levelled archers, or a single overpowered one and – as you said – the balancing isn't the strongest aspect of the game.
– Players probably shouldn't be in charge of advancing the waves by themselves. Leave some breathing space between the waves, but advance the waves automatically. Don't put the player in the position of "nothing dangerous happens, unless you voluntarily choose to" because a known phenomenon is that many players tend to choose the safe, anti-fun ways to stroll through a game without risk – which isn't very enjoyable in the end.
– The Restart button right in front of the castle is pure evil. If you need to shoot the enemies close to your gates, you could accidentally misclick and restart the game. Why don't you hide the restart button until the castle gets destroyed?
– Why are the enemies always spawned in a single giant cluster? Wouldn't it be better if they came in small groups in some order (for example start with 1, then send a group of 3, etc.)
– Are there different types of enemies later on? Not just with larger health, but with different abilities (for example enemy archers, or giants).

Also, if you don't know the game already, I heartily recommend you to take a look and perhaps inspiration from Defend Your Castle: https://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/102209

Bugs:
– Enemies only harm the castle on the initial impact, then they just stand awkwardly until you shoot them. They should probably attack like every three seconds or so.
– You shoot arrows even when you click on buttons (which shouldn't happen).
– The arrow does crazy things as it passes through the ground.

Graphics & UI:
– It's a bit simplistic, but that's okay.
– The UI is somewhat chaotic and unaligned. The plus buttons don't have the same distance between them, there are different font sizes (and some are too small)
– Consider using icons for damage, speed and accuracy instead of text. Just a thought.
– If you can, avoid using the defaults because they are too recognisable and placeholder-ish. Default Unity buttons, default dropdown, default 2D scene blue background…
– Why doesn't the ground go all the way to the bottom of the screen? The castle and the thin ledge now look like it's floating.

Still, a good game, especially if it's your first one. Good luck if you decide to continue working on this one, or with your next one. And welcome to Newgrounds!

CBernal responds:

Thanks for reviewing my game!
I will be working in some new updates and fixes for this week. (hopefully i can finish this for the weekend)

[Coinbag]

Quite good game, I liked it.
It would be nice to see an indicator of how many keys and coin bags you have (and need to collect) so you can plan better and don't run out of keys.
You can cheat a bit on the ground floor by going around the edge of the screen instead of unlocking the door to save a key, although there's a substantial risk of death if you miss a jump and fall. If this isn't intended, you could simply block us from going behind the edge of the screen.

GalefreeGames2 responds:

Thanks, I just added walls there because I like that the player can fall to their death XD

[Campo Afuera]

There's a surprising lack of laughing dogs. :)

I love the pixel art, but the gameplay is too simple to be enjoyable.
I probably can't avoid comparing this to Duck Hunt.
https://youtu.be/x-daxzVxrQI
Notice that in that game, the ducks come in waves, you have to react quickly and their fly trajectory is unpredictable. It keeps you on your toes.

Here, the ducks follow completely predictable straight lines, there's a lot of them and you can take as much time as you need. I don't even need to move the crosshair and just wait for the ducks to come in the line of fire. And it is a full line, so you're almost guaranteed to hit something as your bullet moves across the screen.
I wouldn't say it's boring, but certainly very casual.

Also, there's no animation for shooting the ducks (they just blink out of existence), the crosshair should be pixel art, too (since everything else is) and the score panel (and the score count itself) isn't aligned properly (outside of full-screen).

Be7ruvio responds:

Sure, I know I still have a lot to do, like making the ducks follow a certain trajectory and adding more animations. The crosshair is actually pixel art but it turned out to be a lot smaller than I tought so it doesn’t seem like it is. And yes, I always loved duck hunt so I tried to make something similar lol. I will definitely improve it, thank you for all the advice :D

[Sarah]

Really incredible.
It's quite short – completely understandable for a game jam – but not without a proper (and pretty interesting) conclusion. I like the art style, too.

Figuring out the phone combination was the hardest part. I knew it had to do something with Sam, I just didn't know what exactly. Their dinner date (time/month/day), West Side fair date, birthdays, team shirt number…
I like the subtle clues leading you to the right direction of the solution though. The lock screen picture was a heart – great. You also know the date format should be MM/DD (and not DD/MM) because that's how it was written in the diary (and the newspapers), and the phone also didn't have a zero digit button (nor visible letters) which did eventually help to narrow the selection down. Kudos, if these were intentional.

It's a pity there are no sounds or music. It'd make the game instantly better and help set up the mood. Especially the sounds (taking items, phone digits, lights on/off, the rustling of paper…); you're not as immersed into the game as you would be otherwise.

Some way to determine which part of the background is interactive would be nice too – for example by showing the object's name as you hover over it, or gentle outer glow, or changing the mouse cursor. Now you have to click on every single cupboard and drawer in the kitchen just to determine they're, in fact, not interactable. I also didn't notice the electricity plug for a long time because it's simply not very noticeable.

A neat little piece for a game jam – and the ending is great.

JinxSpell responds:

Hey Rallyx! The consistent date format and lack of zero was intentional, thanks for noticing!! Yeah I agree that it's unfortunate we didn't have time for music or sound effects. We barely got it in time for the jam. Changing the mouse on hover is a great idea. Originally, everything was going to be clickable, and did some useless action, but we ran out of time completely. Agreed on the electricity plug point as well. Thanks for your thorough review!

[Race_Game]

I like it; it's quite fun, although there's a couple of problems.

First, and mainly – the game does not restart when you lose (making 'highscore' pointless). Whether you crash the car or run out of fuel, the game does not restart. Now, I later found out you can restart the game with 'R', but it's not written anywhere. You shouldn't rely on people's ability to 'guess' the controls. What about a restart button on the screen when it's Game Over?
When you crash, you can also potentially get hit twice immediately afterwards (e.g. when hitting a wall). There should be some temporary invincibility.
I also did not see a single powerup until the 20k checkpoint (or weirdly, after I died). If you stand still and wait, some do appear,

I was quite thrilled to see a "boss battle", but I can't get past it. The car becomes invincible, drives in random directions (no matter which keys I press), bounces and you're also no longer colliding with items like spikes or powerups. I'm not sure what you're supposed to be doing (high score: 20,003).
And AGAIN, I later figured it out – the boss which looks exactly the same as your car (!) spawned and killed me before I noticed. I thought I was healed before the boss battle, instead, it spawned while I was close to the centre and "replaced" me.
But I think the checkpoint and especially the zoom out is a good idea. I'd at least make the enemy car blue to make a distinction.

As for other things:
– I'm not sure if 'Boost' is useful. It just makes you more likely to crash.
– Not sure what the "crowned bean" powerup does.
– The boss probably should get hit by spikes. Also, I feel your fuel runs out too quickly during this phase. You have to evade his attacks, but doing so makes you lose when you run out of fuel.
– Why do we need the compass? Surely we can tell which way the car is headed even without it…
– The whole page scrolls when pressing arrow keys, especially when you have the compass powerup. Try the workaround as described here:
https://www.newgrounds.com/wiki/developer-resources/unity3d-webgl-support#wiki_toc_4

DerpGio responds:

I will try to fix many of these. First, I actually can't believe I forgot to mention the restart button, I know about the double crash and I think your idea is very good and I might implement it. The powerups are very random as they have a chance to spawn after a certain amount pf seconds, and I had to nerf them from spawning to much. The compass was implemented because one of my friends/playtesters found it hard to tell which direction they were going in and I will try to fix the page scrolling thing too.
(Spoiler alert)
The bean stops the car from acting for 3 seconds.

[Zapper]

Great idea, although it's not very much right now.
At first, I didn't know how to zap because it doesn't work very well long-distance, but once the robots get closer, it looks cool.
There's little point of giving you constructive criticism right now, since everything is probably going to change, but well…
– I'd pick better ambient music than a six-second loop – it works initially, but gets annoying quite quickly.
– The game window is quite small; consider adding a fullscreen mode without the IndexedDB part at the bottom.
– I'm not sure if the zap ability works on multiple robots at once; perhaps it should.
– What about jumping? There's a lot of obstacles which would help you slow down the enemies if you could jump over them
– You can fall off the world boundaries, but who cares at this point of development…

I think this would make a really great horror game, especially if the environment was darker and you didn't get the zap ability until later. At one point, I was cornered by the robots and even though they didn't harm me, I was completely unable to move until I blasted my way to freedom. Imagining that, in the dark, with creepier robots; running through a maze of dimly lit corridors, until you reach a large room where you're completely surrounded, panic and learn to zap through – I'd personally consider it far more interesting (and with a story-telling potential) than if it was a simple shooter about zapping hostile robots until they get close and kill you.

Good luck!

Trell13 responds:

Thanks for the ideas. That does sound cool. I'll probably do just that.

[The First Anomaly]

Is there any content so far besides the initial corridor? I tried to run in all directions but the "mist" is faster (presumably because sprinting doesn't work). If you're supposed to do something once you reach a dead end, I didn't figure it out (or didn't have the time). Your walking speed is a bit slow either way.
I didn't encounter any interactable objects. For a first time player, having ~3 seconds to *guess* what you're supposed to be doing, after which you get killed and have to replay the game is quite difficult.

A fullscreen mode would be nice and as JeffreyDriver said, 1.5GB is quite a lot, especially since a single corridor is all I can see. Heck, the demo you linked on the forums last week had a third of that; 522 MB.

Trell13 responds:

There's a couple rooms you can enter but without the sprint system the game is broken. I dont know how to lower the file size any lower but I can try. There are switches that you have to hit in different areas to unlock an exit. I'll have to test it more.